r/OCPoetry • u/IamToofan • 23h ago

Just Sharing The Moon

After so many days, I finally saw the moon.
She doesn't know how beautiful she looks from here.
I can only gaze at her from afar
And whisper sweet words into the night,
knowing she will never hear them.
Because somehow, she makes my night feel less dark.

​When our eyes meet,
Time stands still,
And I get lost somewhere inside.

​'Moon' is just the name we gave her,
But what is her real name?
I want to know that,
But I cannot go there—
Because she is the moon.

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u/OkDevelopment9363 18h ago

This is a beautiful metaphor. You can really feel the longing. It feels more like a love poem than a poem about the moon.

I think you could maybe go for a different, more abstract title, that relates more to the yearning angle. The poem is about the moon but on a deeper level it feels like it’s about wanting and admiring someone that you cannot have.

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u/IamToofan 18h ago

Both the interpretation are correct. And I thought this simple title works because it supports both.

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u/OkDevelopment9363 18h ago

I totally see that! It’s a great poem :)