Recently (In may) I burnt the back of my hand. I want to write my essay around that and how it taught me to allow life to happen and not try and plan every small thing. I used to overly plan everything but now i’m learning to take it day by day. A little more context is I burnt my hand 30 days before the SAT and 4 days before my birthday. I have a rough draft if anyone is willing to read it and lmk what I should do. I need my essay to make up for the lack of my transcript, not that my grades are bad but i’m graduating 2 years early so I only have a year worth of grades. My gpa is 4.26 though.

Hello everybody, I am a Moroccan student applying to us unies, and I want help with my essays (bcs I know that they are the most important part in the college applications). a girl suggested to me finding someone to link me with a student at a top tier university who will review my essays and propose enhancement points(which is is a good option) but I do not know how to do it.
I have searched options but I was confused since everyone shows that its service is the best and there is no honest reviews. Do u know any good centers, online stuffs that could help.
Thanks in advance!

I took one last look from the fabled stage to the crowd of 10,000 strangers before me. The applause may not have cured my mood after a less-than perfect show, but it was the first time I recognized the sound of my future. Four years later, I close my final show in the School of Rock music program with a long list of my gratitudes and farewells. I could stay if I wanted to - another year, actually, but my relationship with music has progressed, and I know I’m making the decision that’s right for myself.
Ten years ago, my family made the move from the NYC area to Boulder, Colorado. It was at this time I was starting to take up an interest in guitar, likely inspired by my dad's playing, though lessons with him proved to be somewhat discouraging to my seven year-old self (tears were involved).
That same summer, my family took the drive to Red Rocks Amphitheatre for Film on the Rocks - “The Princess Bride”. Anticipating the movie’s commencement on screen, the words “School of Rock” appeared in bright red, striking against the remaining golden light over the distant Denver downtown. Moments later, an actual teenage band took the stage and broke into “Sweet Child O’ Mine.” They played with energy, skill and bravado. By the time the song peaked at the guitar solo, I was entranced. Picturing myself on the same stage, in front of 10,000 people, I knew that’s what I wanted for myself.

Seizing the inspiration, my mom drove me to School of Rock Boulder that same week, and I left enrolled. 10 years later, I can easily say that it has made me who I am as a musician today, not because of the countless lessons, or the amazing people I’ve met, or even eventually getting to play at Red Rocks myself. The most important thing I learned, simply from playing music with other people, is that music is a form of social connection and personal expression. And that’s why I eventually left. I started my own band the summer before junior year with some of my best friends. We went to town on songwriting, and a revelation came to me one rehearsal in my garage: Our friendship was audible in the music. Not to say the music sounded friendly, but our band’s sound blended together the way an established friend group interacts; listening and complementing each other, reaching a balance point between the five of us. As expected with highschool bands, our break up was inevitable when three members left for college in the fall. But playing our own music as opposed to covers at School of Rock let me share my own voice musically for the first time. Playing our original songs on stage gave me the same sense of validation that an honest conversation with an elder would. This is how I want to share myself with the world, and I have continued writing songs independently since. Having discovered my new musical priority, the last year at School of Rock marked a shift for me. I felt my role as a student become redefined as increasingly, I was asked to help the younger kids with their parts, or direct a song or, on multiple occasions, fill in for someone who called in sick from a show last minute. I happily would, but came to recognize that I was no longer there to prove myself as a student, but to support those who were. As of now, I’m wrapping up an era of songwriting, and setting my sights on recording and production. Music is how I express myself, and I feel it is the greatest thing I can contribute to the world. That is what makes something worth pursuing, and for me, that means graduating high school a semester early to develop my studio album, “Carpe Diem.”

(background) i dropped out of college last semester and worked full time/enrolled in cosmetology school, but quickly realized i wanted to finish my degree. weighted gpa of 3.0 and top school is CU Boulder

I am a college dropout. I walked away from my freshman year 4 months ago, when it finally clicked that I had been treating higher education as a passive obligation rather than an active choice. I realized I had been suffocating for years under academic pressure and burnout, and eventually made the decision to withdraw from my classes. At the time, stepping away felt like admitting defeat. I spent years being taught that success meant continuing to forge ahead, and suddenly I had chosen the opposite. I struggled to shake the feeling that I had failed myself, so I pulled away from an academic environment and used that time to pursue more tangible experiences to figure out what I wanted from life.
I began working full time and enrolled in a vocational school. Time away from my degree taught me a kind of self-discipline I had never developed, as I had never been required to be anything other than compliant with another party's expectations. I suddenly had to create structure for myself. I learned to manage my energy, plan out my days on color coded calendars, and show up consistently even when I had that familiar feeling of exhaustion. These experiences showed me how much I had missed college, and that what previously happened didn't have to define my relationship with education. I never stopped wanting an education; I just needed to step away and develop the maturity necessary to succeed.
In school, my definition of success became unhealthy. I believed to be successful was to never stop, and eventually, I wore myself down until I could no longer keep up. This philosophy had followed me all the way from high school to college. It took me many courses, credits, and withdrawals to realize that I had spent the last year of my life sitting in lecture halls, mentally incapable of internalizing the information being fed to me. I learned that the independence of school requires a sustainable foundation, not just stamina or the intense pace I was formerly used to. Instead of the stress I once associated with schooling, my time away taught me that devotion doesn't mean pushing myself past my limits. It means understanding what I can realistically maintain and taking responsibility for following through.
I remember waking up at 5 a.m. every day for work, knowing that I still had cleaning, cooking, and assignments waiting for me afterward. A year ago, I would have drowned. Instead, I went to work, came home, and did what needed to be done. There was no one to hold me to the things that I had promised myself. No professor reminding me of deadlines, no parent looming over my shoulder, and no one who could make me keep the promises I had made. If I wanted something done, I was going to have to be the one to do it. After years of telling myself “tomorrow” and relying on the reminders of those around me, I found that my success wasn't their responsibility. It was mine. I came to understand that my mistakes were things I had made, not things I had to let define me.
Ultimately, I decided to return to school. It took time away for me to realize that I wasn't pursuing a degree because it was the next step, or because I felt like I should. I am pursuing it intentionally. My transcripts reflect the things that I was, rather than who I became. I am prepared for a second chance, not by ignoring my past mistakes, but by learning from them and building the foundation I need to finish what I started. I’m not returning because I feel I deserve to forget what happened. I am returning because I finally know why it happened, and what I need to change. I once saw college as a requirement; now I see it as an opportunity.

I’m looking for multiple reviewers. Heads up the personal statement is a little graphic but it is handled in a non explicit way

Hello! As a student preparing for admission season, I would love to have anyones input on how to work with a specific prompt I have been struggling with.

LF HELP: With the overwhelming asks Waseda asks for, i’m finding it especially hard to balance the topic, the college, and still show my personality throughout while still staying academic. In addition, I am scared that my topic may be a little cliche, and since I focused more on a growth of interest rather then personal growth, it may seem robotic/pretentious. Any advice on the ratio between topics or reconsideration on my main point is appreciated ^_^!

WORD LIMIT: 800

PROMPT: From Waseda April Admissions, it is too long to write, so I have a link instead.
https://www.waseda.jp/fire/sils/assets/uploads/2026/08/Essay-Question_Apr2027.pdf

DRAFT ESSAY: I am not comfortable sharing it here, but I can share a summarized version and DM it to anyone who wants to help!

“いただきます、 Lets Eat!”

The essay is basically about how the 3 generations in my family each grew up in vastly different cultures(My parents in Vietnam, me in America, and my brother in Japan), and our dinner chats together made me realize how the environments we grew up in contributed to our values and outlook today(Related to prompt ong).
Furthermore, competitions abroad for journalism had me constantly questioning different perspectives from my peers and my subjects, as we all come from vastly different backgrounds and therefore would challenge each other’s viewpoint often. Through revisiting my own standpoints, I was able to gain a deeper understanding on how each of our environments had shaped us to think a specific way(also related to prompt), and learned to adapt for open communication.
Overall, this topic is meant to highlight the importance of cultural/social understanding towards cross-cultural communication, adapting a message to fit the understanding of an environment, and my growth of interest in using media to do so.

(This is not the best summary)

Thank you in advance for any advice!! I am willing to clarify.

So I'm currently working on three drafts. Two and three currently are non existent since i got the assignment yesterday. However, I did make the mistake of drinking a full alani and made this absolute garbage draft. Apologies to anyone who reads it. Advice is very appreciated.

My topic for draft one is why people dislike south africa within the african diaspora. (Yes, I am part of the SouthA hater discourse💯💯💯💯💯)

"If you are wondering why the majority of sub saharan africans dislike south africa. I am here to inform you exacrly why. When you look at   the history of south africa. It is a interesting nation. With deep history and ethnic diversity.
  However, when it comes to how south africa is viewed within the african diaspora. You will lear, their repuation is quite poor. From violence aginst immigrants to their misplaced anger, south africans are very popular among the diaspora.

South africans have a extremely sad history. Their colonization was violent and to this day has lasting affects. However, much of their anger to the political injustices they experience is misplaced. South Africaaners face continuos struggles with unemployment, fair treatment, and political recognition. They are often seen as outsiders within their own anger. Treatment such as that begins to brew frustration within black africaaners. 

The average life of a black south african is not glamourous–quite the opposite. 62% of black south africans live below the poverty line. Such a percentage highlights the difficulty of their daily lives. South africa has its own heirachy based on race that is much different than the USA or any other heterogenus nations. Despite their civil rights movements, not much has changed. South africans are still oppressed within their own nation. When faced with poverty and systemic struggles. The average south african feels cheated, especially when immigrants from neighboring nations enter South Africa and seem to do better.

The truth is immigrants are not magically harder working or better than the average black africaaner. They are simply less shackled by systemic limitations. That priviledge is difficult to ignore when the unemployment rate for black africaaners is over 35% compared to 15% for immigrants. The result of that anger is violence towards those they feel are compeition

There is constant conflict between the african diaspora and africaaners because of this. We see the harm done to immigrants and are appalled by it because our nations have always been welcooming to south africans. Its not just the hypocrisy shown but the extent of the violence taken against imigrantss within south africa.

(insert paragraph about events where South africans harmed immigrants. Include what happened in june. Mention the robbings, killing, and the theft of businesses that immigrants worked hard to create.)"

I'll send a docs link

hey! i am currently working on my responses for questbridge and was wondering if anyone could provide feedback 🙏 thank you!

I've legit been thinking for an entire month on what to write for my personal statement and every idea I come up eventually comes to an end because either I don't have much content to write about or I just don't know how to connect myself to it. I'm actually such a loser I have no achievements and like no hobbies (I just play random games or like watch anime). To be honest I feel like I spent most of my high school years just studying and doing homework and if not that then procrastinating by doom scrolling. I'm also just a terrible writer in general. My writing is way too formal, it has no personality, it doesn't really feel like I'm trying to tell a story. It just feels like I'm trying to follow a rubric for some English assignment. Since I'm a boring person I tried my best coming up with and idea that could be interesting like how I like to make different snow sculptures every year when it snows or like maybe write about a weekly chore I do such as taking out the trash and some how connect it to a way that reflects me. But yea please give any tips for people like me.

Right now, I’m trying to figure out how to answer an essay prompt, and I don’t really know what the best way to go about it is. The prompt asks about unique challenges or opportunities I’ve faced in high school and how they’ve affected me.

I don’t have many ways to answer this. My biggest challenge I’ve faced has been mental health, but I know that sob stories don’t usually do well. However, I’m hoping to major in psychology, so I’m wondering if writing about my mental health struggles would actually be beneficial to me there?

I have auto admission to the school I’m writing this for, but their psychology program is extremely competitive. So, preferably, I’d like for my essay to center on what makes me a good candidate for a psychology major.

TLDR: Would it be a bad idea to write about mental health on my college essay, even if I want to major in psychology?

hi I finished up my draft for my transfer essay and would like some feedback on it!

I'll send the doc if you're willing

Hii! I genuinely have no idea what to write about. Like I have a few ideas but i dont even know if they are good. And I think that advice from others would help so.

1. Wanting to be more punjabi/indian And how growing up in America, my brother can speak punjabi better than i can and i feel like every time I try to or like be more in touch with my culture i feel like a fraud or that im doing too much.
2. rejecting feminity all my life and now im trying to accept it and lean more into it.
3. I really like greek mythogy, i havent really thought of anything in the realm yet for what I could write about but i really like the story of icarus so im thinking of tying something to that?

Please give me some feedback on these!!

Hi guys!! i’m a senior rn and I just finished writing my personal statement. I’ve been given some mixed reviews on it such as it’s amazing, really eye catching and stuff. but the reviewer i value the most aka my brother told me it’s not that great, it’s clunky, and i jump between 1st and 3rd person. he’s says the overall idea is good but it just need more cooking lol.

can anyone give me any advice on how i can make it less clunky? like when i read it myself it sounds fluid and like my voice.

always when i put it into ai it says it looks like i wrote it with thesaurus and 650 words (ouch 😭) like i swear i only searched up 2 words which was inertia and imperceptible. like i feel like i write the bridge between a poem and a YA fiction book.

idk what to do please help!!

I’ve written two drafts but I feel it’s not compelling enough of me

Hello, I wrote my first draft of a college essay and it seems pretty bland to me but I'm not entirely sure what it's missing either and I'd love some feedback

I'm in my middle school bathroom, school has already ended. I'm alone. The video camera facing me counts down: 3… 2… 1… 

I begin singing, acting, using my whole body to show how devastated I am because my “one feather tail” makes me less attractive than all of the other birds. When I’m done singing I run up to my phone and check the video. I rewatch it and find a million things I can do to improve my performance, thinking that I made so many mistakes, comparing myself to the Broadway cast of Seussical. I didn’t have enough time to redo the video, so I edited it and sent it to my high school application portal. 

Before, I never really considered musical theater as a thing that I would be good at. I always thought that I wasn’t meant to be watched or admired by other people. But, in middle school I thought that the kids in the drama club were so cool. The thing I admired most about them was their confidence in their abilities and stage presence.

I eventually joined my middle school drama club in the second half of 7th grade because my friend told me that they might let me help with the props. When I got there they made me audition for the musical and I didn't try out for a lead. I was petrified of getting in front of the teachers and having them sit there and judge me as I was singing. 

That night, the cast list came out and I saw my name underneath the ensemble. And I felt excited? When we did the show I felt like I was part of a community of people who I could support and wanted to support me.

Throughout the rest of middle school I kept auditioning for shows and I even got a lead role in the 8th grade. When I was on stage all I could think about was people judging me for being untalented. I thought so much about not meeting people’s expectations of me that I didn’t pay attention to having fun with my friends.

The bathroom audition helped get me into a performing arts high school where I found a new community of people who I learned to feel comfortable with. In sophomore year I auditioned for The Prom. I got a lead again, this time she was the villain. I wanted my performance to be perfect and I would get upset when I forgot my lines or blocking. My castmates saw that I was having trouble, so they would hype me up before I went on stage. By the dress rehearsal I felt much more comfortable in the character and was able to get on stage without second guessing myself. Those performances I barely paid attention to what the audience thought of me and if I was portraying the character perfectly.

Now I’m a senior standing alongside my castmates. Five minutes before the show starts. We’re all holding hands and doing our pre-show ritual of “passing the pulse” by squeezing each other's hands around the circle. I look around at everyone there: people I've known since freshman year and the friends that I’ve made as I’ve grown up at this school. I feel so grateful for this art and how it’s driven me to grow into the person that I am today. 

The pulse has made it back to my director, they give us a speech and tell us to leave everything on the stage. Everyone cheers, excitement fills the room, and we start heading to the stage. When I get to places, the orchestra finishes the overture. The curtain opens and I can see all of the faces in front of me, smiling at something that I helped create. And I feel so light. 

Hey all! I just finished my newest college essay draft. I was somewhat partially inspired by Hugh Gallaghers famous essay for my first paragraph, but I think I made it my own. Of course, if anyone else thinks otherwise, please lmk!

I’d really appreciate any feedback on the essay, good or bad, I just would really like some help

want to write about getting an ear piercing in a strict muslim pakistani household and area cause i was inspired by some black rappers just dont want it to be bad or cliche or have the reader at the end go so whats the point

ps im a guy guys dont get their ears pierced here

My wallet is basically empty. Does anyone know a genuinely cheap essay writing service that won't totally ruin my GPA? I know going for the absolute cheapest essay writing service is risky, but I'm desperate and on a super strict student budget. If you've actually used any cheap essay writing services lately that came through with a decent paper, please drop the link or name! Really appreciate any lifesavers right now🙏

I didnt really know what direction to go in and Id love some advice on pretty much everything.

Basically, I had this great idea for an essay about some activity that I did over 2 years, but it turns out my friend, who I did it with, is also writing about it? We're applying to some of the same T10/T20 schools, and I'm concerned that if we write about the same prompt, advisors may compare us side by side. I'm not sure I'll win that battle. Should I stay away from this topic?

as the title itself says, please please please is there anyone who can help me with my personal one page essay?

I have revised my essay about 20 times to the point where I am numb to reading it. Can someone please read over my personal statement and let me know what they think? I didn't go with the traditional narrative structure and I don't know if it's good.