r/WritersGroup 11h ago

Question Alternatives to Google Docs? WriterDuet?

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I am primarily a playwright but I have been dabbling in short stories. When I'm writing scripts, I use WriterDuet (fantastic for playwrights and screenwriters, by the way!) but when I'm writing prose, I go to Google Docs.

However, I'm nervous about Google's AI features and potentially stealing my work. This is not a debate about whether or not Google is or isn't; I know that they say they aren't but I also know that there's really nothing stopping them from taking it. I'd rather be safe than sorry so I want to move my work to a more secure platform.

I hear people talking about getting a Microsoft Word subscription but a) how is MSW different from Google Docs and b) I already have a subscription to WriterDuet -- it already has a feature for writing novels, short stories, etc. and while the formatting is different from GD or MSW, I can definitely work with it.

In short, my question is this: Is my work any safer on a platform like WriterDuet? If not, what are other writers using?

(I've also read about some people just writing everything in a very basic notes app, but I really don't want to do that so if there's a way I can protect my work while still having helpful features, let me know!)

Thanks, D


r/WritersGroup 9h ago

Question How do you write a scene where a character discovers something about themselves without it reading like they just had a therapy breakthrough mid story?

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This is the craft problem I keep hitting and I want honest feedback on whether my instinct about the fix is right.

Working on a literary short story. There is a moment near the end where my protagonist arrives at a genuine self understanding that the whole piece has been building toward. Not a dramatic revelation, just a quiet shift in how she sees something she has been misreading for most of the story.

Every version I write tips into one of two problems. Either the moment is too visible and feels like the story stopping to announce its own meaning, or I underwrite it so completely in the name of subtlety that readers I have shown it to miss it entirely and the ending lands as nothing happening.

The self understanding moments I admire most in literary fiction are almost never stated directly but they are also unmistakably present. The character does not say I finally understand something. But the reader finishes the page knowing something shifted in a way that cannot be unfelt. I cannot reverse engineer how that works from the outside well enough to produce it deliberately in my own draft.

My instinct is that the fix lives in finding the exact right physical detail or action that carries the understanding without stating it. That the moment needs an object or a gesture that means something specific to this character based on everything that came before. But finding the right one has proven harder than the instinct suggests it should be.

Is there a way other writers here think about this kind of moment that actually helps in the draft or is it one of those things you find by accident and then pretend you planned it.


r/WritersGroup 18h ago

In need of Feedback/Harsh judgement!! This is the draft I wrote and I'm not finding suitable readers who'd give me a worthy feedback (that's why I joined this community)

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Memoirs of Ashes

Greetings, reader.

This is meant to be an introductory page. Or whatever one calls the beginning of something I hope you will not forget. Here I will put down a few thoughts of my own. They may well resonate with yours.

They say education begins at home. That a child learns by observing. That is true. But a child also learns, for the first time, what a relationship is. As for myself — I was taught to lie. Not because I did not know how to tell the truth. Because my lies pleased them. When I lied, I was theirs. When I told the truth, I was a traitor. And I came to prefer lying. Why? Because it was easier. Lies built trust quickly. My truths were bitter and they drove away the very people I could not afford to lose. I have always hated losing. People or otherwise. The moment I have no reason to fear, I become anxious. As if everything will end the next moment, as if it will all be over. That feeling — the dread — I chase it. It puts me at ease. Some things are beyond redemption. Such as my preference for anxiety over calm.

Growing up taught me nothing is permanent. What comes, goes. I learned the misconceptions we have about attachment. "I love you, so I will stay." No. Sometimes one must let go. It is never easy. It is an art. It may be painful at first, but you do not know the peace that comes after.

No amount of reassurance can give me the peace I crave. I never let anyone know what I am thinking next. I have been through thick and thin, through days and nights that would curdle one's blood to merely imagine. And yet you will always see me smiling. People tell me they cannot believe it.

That is why I became a psychiatrist. Not to cure. To translate. To sit opposite people who also smile when they should not. I do not keep case files. I keep accounts. These are some of them.

March 14th 1985…

I've been called to Esquirol in Saint-Maurice for a modest consultation. An adolescent, now a criminal. He had been under restraints for four months. He had put two staff members in the infirmary and anyone who had tried to interview him. According to the court he was a minor, mentally disturbed and absolutely needed to be under supervision. I handed the dossier back to the nurse without reading it.

I never underestimate my patients, though I never encourage them to think they are above me either.

There is an art in opening a disturbed person's door: If you open it too fast, it is deemed threatening. If you open it too slowly, the creaking will disturb the person on the other side into thinking you are a predator. Predators are never fast. They are slow, precise, and undoubtedly accurate. I had no intention of appearing as a threat, nor as a predator that day, so I simply opened the door as one would when entering one's own house. As I stepped inside, the orderlies were already working the metal locks behind me with a sharp jingling of keys.

Well — the boy was even taller than I expected, lion-faced, his face marked with old dermatitis artefacta at the temples and jaw, his nails bitten to the quick, a healed slit through his left eyebrow.

I walked, not too fast, not too slow, and sat down opposite him. I kept the clipboard the nurse had handed me earlier face down on the iron table.

"How was your day?" I asked, loud, too cheerful for a white padded cell. I could tell he was completely caught off guard. His eyes twitched. No answer. A disappointment, but I consider it progress.

"Aw, no reply, I see." Then I tilted my head to the side. I quite hate being professionally formal with clipboards and pushed-up glasses. But before I could question him, he spoke.

"Are you here to tame me too, doctor?" he asked with a disdainful downturn of his mouth. He thought I was some regular psychiatrist who would jot down his every minute reaction and call it therapy.

"I thought the word was civilize," I said, leaning back with an easy smile. His bound wrists twitched at the sound of my voice, which considering the situation was too light-hearted and unprofessional.

"Never mind." I cut his thoughts short. "I would like to ask for your name, since I didn't read your file."

He seemed very skeptical. After a tense moment of contemplating he finally answered, "Why?" It was clipped and defensive.

I shrugged and crossed my arms over my chest. "Because I don't believe a man's history can be stamped onto a few pages."

"Anything you do here won't make a difference to me," the boy said flatly after a moment, his jaw set in a stubborn line I wished to erase.

I closed my eyes for a moment. This one doesn't let me inside his head, but one thing is clear: he doesn't want to discuss what has happened to him, what's inside him, nor does he want anyone's help.

They say he's gone. I'll believe it by judging the five wishes I asked him to write by tomorrow.

Revirement — a change of mind.

March 16th 1985...

My schedule kept me away. Again the same routine. Polite smiles, nods and greetings. Again that door. And again it closed behind me, orderlies putting the lock back in place.

I was handed the parchment on which he had written the wishes I asked him for before I entered. I thought the day might never come — I'll admit this about a patient, no less — but... He did not have a bad hand. In fact, it looked well thought out and slightly exaggerated with those twirly ends to his letters. They told me he had been particularly aggressive today so they had fed him Haldol, so he was conscious but his eyes wouldn't focus. But I went inside anyway. The actual thing was, I was looking into the psychology of the room. Once my very wise senior said — "The madman's furniture is his fixed idea made visible."

The first thing that I noticed was... well. The cell was correct. That's the first wrong thing about it. Walls untouched with filth or any scratches with nails a few of the patients would have, the tin mug, the low stool next to that cot parallel to the door on which he lay unmoving. The iron table is perpendicular to it. The boy treated the room like he was about to leave yesterday. Second wrong thing about it — I can't tell if he lived here for four months or four minutes. Even if a few of my great pals here would jot — the patient presents no furniture disorder. But I believe that — Disorder lies in absence of disorder. Third wrong thing about it that is like an itch from a mosquito I can't scratch off my skin is — I don't know if it was deliberate. The first thing he wrote was — The lights never turn off. He wrote lights never turn off as his first wish, not food, new clothes, not even freedom but light. I caught myself smiling again. Most patients would ask for a window. But he asked for darkness. Because here in Charenton, the light is not for utility. It's supervision. When they say 'light out' in Esquirol, they mean they turn off his light so that they can see him better in theirs— So he had done what any adolescent would — he had stopped believing in the night. If he cannot make the light disappear, he cannot make himself disappear. I will not turn it off. If I did, he wouldn't be so patient after all. The only sign of paranoia I had detected in him was — to whatever I say, he always replies at least five seconds later. Paranoid people are usually loud and overwhelming, but he isn't. The second wish was his food. They feed him some bouillon which grows a skin by the time it reaches him. There's a small line by the boy just beneath it — "It looks like they washed the floor with it." I would later ask him to elaborate on this wish. I get it, that's not the most ideal meal you would like to have but this is Esquirol. Charenton. He's saying I don't know the difference between his meal and stale brown water.

Apprivoiser — to tame.

March 17th 1985…

The sound of my alarm pierced my eardrums. Dawn had not yet broken, but I could hear footsteps in the hallway heading towards the cafeteria. I shrugged off the blanket and placed my feet on the floor, feeling the cold of the linoleum. After freshening up and changing my clothes, I emerged from the logement, crossed the corridor and exchanged a few polite nods directed my way. Upon arrival at the cafeteria, most of the lower-ranking psychiatrists deliberately avoided my gaze. Some purposefully adjusted their uniforms or looked at their breakfast to avoid appearing rude. So, everyone knows what the foreigner is here for. What a great way to start the day indeed.

I entered his cell again. He was seated at the edge of his bed with a glassy expression. Looks like the effects of Haldol have not worn off yet. Anyway, I chose to sit beside him at a respectful distance. Sitting at similar positions is a direct way to enforce familiarity. It keeps the patients from feeling inferior, but I wanted to test him.

"Your second wish, as you have written... was the food. Do you want a change of food or a chef?" I asked the boy lightheartedly. I doubt if he can comprehend anything in this state.

"You aren't going to turn them off, right?" he asked groggily, not looking at me.

I raised an eyebrow in amusement. "What exactly?"

"You know exactly what I am talking about."

I tilted my head to a side. "You know right, that's not possible."

"You asked me to list five things, but didn't give me your word that you'd make them true." His tone was undoubtedly accusing.

"That was part of my practice. By the way, how do you think I assess my patients?"

"By observing them."

"Not entirely. I empathize with them, I observe them, then I get into their heads."

"You can observe me, but not get into my head. What have you discovered about me?"

"That's a secret," I said and pulled out his neatly folded list from my breast pocket, scanning the contents. "Elaborate on your wish about food."

"I want them to eat it first before serving me." The boy said gravely, finally turning to look at me.

My eyebrows rose slightly, not in surprise. "That's one hell of a wish you are asking for. And why do you think they would do it?"

He turned his gaze to the stone floor. "That's the point. They won't. They can't. Eating it means getting stripped of humanity itself."

"Did you eat that?"

"I tried to... because I was starving. And I don't wish to die like that." He said in a dull voice.

I noticed that the boy was slack today, maybe from the sedative or resigned from his earlier rowdiness.

Soi-disant — so-called.

March 18th 1985…

It was clear, even to an outsider, that I could not humour his wish for special food. The least the institution could grant him was an extra egg or bread. Insufficient, but sufficient when your suppliant is a patient.

"The infirmiers talk to me as if I am a dog" — his third wish. Quite immature to be verbally sparse with someone who is in an asylum and needs consolation. That's what I said in the staff meeting on Sunday. I even got nods of approval.

I cannot expect a change in the boy if they don't allow a change in themselves. They need to mend their ways, at least their vocabulary.

Today as I entered his cell, the atmosphere in the room was calmer than before, less suffocating, more adequate.

I sat down on the chair opposite the table, he was sitting at the edge of the bed, lost in thought. I let the silence settle for a moment.

"Tell me about your upbringing." I crossed one leg over the other, waiting for his answer.

He took his pause, as expected. Slowly he started, "My mother had a dovecote. When I was a child, she tasked me with culling weak chicks to feed the wolves."

He was calm, "Cruelty can reveal facets of one's personality. Did it never bother you to dispose of them?"

He shook his head slightly, "At first, yes. Then, I learned to master my remorse. It was natural selection in her eyes... I agree with her on this point, feeding weak birds is a waste of resources."

"And your father?"

"Bourgeoisie... he was a fabric trader."

"Was?"

"He is deceased."

"Oh, my apologies."

"Doesn't matter," his mouth curled slightly. As a doctor I knew when to stop.

"They say you put two staff members in the infirmary, is that right?" My fingers drummed at my knee.

"They were forcing me to answer questions I did not want to answer," he said as he wrapped his arms around himself. I looked away respectfully.

"You should've mastered your rage like your remorse."

He sighed sharply, "I cannot control my temper. I get agitated very easily."

"I'll figure out why." I said, then closed my eyes.

I heard his shuffling from the side of the cell so I opened my eyes and saw him moving and straightening his bed with the edge of his palm, meticulously.

I find it a contrast to his actual nature. "Do you have any hobbies?"

He didn't look my way, engrossed in his task, "Arts and piano."

My eyebrows rose in amazement, "But you have not been seen in the common area."

He snorted, "After what I did to those two infirmiers, they locked me up, no going outside since they consider me too violent to mingle with other patients, and they stopped giving me objects, no graphite or paper."

The unavailability of graphite made sense. Some exceptionally creative patients tend to use anything as a weapon, even simple things such as a pencil.

"If I provide you a pencil, would you promise not to misuse it?" I asked straight away.

He paused in his doing. Turned to look at me with scorn, "Do I look mad to you?"

Bourgeoisie — comfortable middle-class /producers who think owning makes them decent.


r/WritersGroup 18h ago

Fiction Would really appreciate any beta readers

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Would appreciate any beta readers

Context (this isn’t the official blurb so forgive me if it has any mistakes or leges things out):

The story is set in a huge world with five kingdoms each seperated by a causeway and surrounded by their own type of sea. The western continent is surrounded by the magma sea, the northern is surrounded by an ice sea, the southern is surrounded by a mirror like sea, the eastern is surrounded by a dark abyssal sea, and the central continent is in the middle of them all and connected to them all.

The story follows kyron discorda whose goal is to be a light seeker: a soldier who stands in the way of humanity and horrors. Horrors are abominations that overrun the world kyron lives in and have forced humanity into a war of survival.

Light seekers make use of branded sigils to gain innate powers and climb the ladder of ascension to fight horrors and save humanity.

Kyron is a naive boy who had always thought it was humanity versus horrors and could never even think otherwise. That is until he finally leaves the walls of the capital on a journey that was supposed to be one of the happiest experiences of his life but instead turned into the beginning of his tragedy.

The story is about kyron coming to terms with the brutalities of the world, learning the truths and discovering the mysteries of the world he lives in, of his power system and more. It’s a story about how he learns to survive and move forward no matter what after being thrown into the depths of despair over and over.

The novel is a dark fantasy and I wrote it so that it’s a true dark fantasy. Characters can die and if the story requires it, they will, but they also won’t die for no random reason. I made it so that there are constant stakes and it is a weak to strong mc that has to struggle for every single power up he gets.

There is nothing given to him and he earns it.

That’s a short context to the story but basically I waged to get opinions from actual readers regarding the first 15 chapters. I hve 105 chapters ready alr but am currently editing them, I just wanted to know if the story itself is compelling and people would acc want to read it.

I would really appropriate if anyone would take the time to read through the first 15 chapters and provide your honest feedback. In terms of grammer and over description those are things I have fixed in later chapters and am currently fixing in early chapters, however, they can remain in the first 15 chapters here. So mainly what I wanted to ask if anyone reading is:

  1. Does the story compel u to continue reading?
  2. Are you drawn to the mc and connect with him?
    3 do u connect with the side characters ?
  3. Do u feel as if you want to continue reading and want to know what happens next?
  4. Is the overall writing good? (Not the over description but just overall writing, dialogues, etc).
    8: any other feedback on the novel, any characters you like, etc

Thanks In advance guys and I really appreciate it if you take the time to read them through.

Here’s the link:

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1G78dpo9FBwjdOl1Kd3GF9uY56CkbMy9k?usp=sharing