r/composer • u/benny2333333 • 1d ago

Music ask for advice

I am not an English native speaker, so please forgive my grammatical errors. I would greatly appreciate it if you could provide specific feedback on the melody, harmony, or other aspects of musical composition.

video:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ngBYt8etAtSeImvqDmNUSgNT5yo4xer7/view?usp=sharing

score:

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1fHVOMwq5-Rbcug5aFhccs1xO8E8zTzwe/view?usp=sharing

video old version (is it better or worse?):

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1b1XLcbA8pWR7KwH9PB7GkJx4j5FqKO70/view?usp=sharing

PS:

I'm new to Reddit, English, and music, but I'll reply to every valuable comment. Thanks!

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u/benny2333333 1d ago

I am a new Reddit user. If you like my work, please vote for me, this is very important to my karma. I earn karma only to post my work, not to earn money. If I do something wrong, please tell me and I will change.

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u/Ordinary-Force3160 1d ago

Hi there. I just listened to it 3 times. I found it moving and liked how it seems to go on a journey. For me, it ended too soon; do you feel like you have more to say with this piece? 

Thanks for posting it. It's not easy to share something as personal as your own music.

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u/benny2333333 1d ago

I have other pieces. Your comment or like will encourage me to share. Thanks

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u/Ordinary-Force3160 1d ago

Yes - please share more.