r/fantasywriters Jul 20 '26

AI-generated content is not allowed on /r/fantasywriters. This includes using LLM tools for translation, including Google Translate.

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Posting AI-generated content is not allowed on /r/fantasywriters. Our rules page makes it clear that we disallow content that is generated in whole or in part by AI. This includes text that was translated by an LLM.

This is a policy that we apply uniformly:

  • You may not post AI-generated writing samples for critique (obviously)
  • You may not post a thread where the body of your reddit post is written by AI.
  • You may not post a comment that is written by AI.
  • You may not post AI-generated images.
  • You may not post text that you asked AI to "rewrite" or "fix" or "improve" for you.
  • You may not post text generated by an LLM, even if the 'only' thing you asked AI to do was translate your text.

In short, do not copy AI-generated text and paste it into your Reddit post. Not as a comment, not as a discussion question. Previously, the point about translated text was ambiguous and enforced inconsistently, so we're making it clear here: an AI-generated translation of your writing created using an LLM like GPT or Google Gemini counts as AI-generated text.

The only exception to this "do not post any LLM-generated content, at all, ever" policy is if you are obviously quoting someone else; we won't ban you if the quote turns out to be AI-generated. (For example, if OP posts an AI-generated story, people who post critiques quoting parts of that AI-generated post won't be banned for their post including the AI-generated text as a quote.)

Please be aware that Google Translate now incorporates Google Gemini, which is an LLM, much like the GPT that is used by OpenAI's ChatGPT. This is considered AI-generated content, and a violation of our "no AI content" policy.

The fact that Google Translate now uses the Google Gemini LLM is why Google Translate now sometimes injects additional information that wasn't part of the text you asked it to translate and why some people are able to query Google Translate and get the same sort of responses you'd get from a conversational chatbot. At this point, using Google Translate is akin to going to an AI chatbot and asking it to translate text for you.

Please note that /r/fantasywriters' prohibition on posting LLM-generated text is not a blanket ban on all machine translation tools.

We still permit the use of translation tools that don't use LLMs, including:

If you're not sure whether a specific machine translation tool would violate our "no LLM-generated text" policy, please feel free to message the moderation team directly to ask for clarity.

FAQ

These are literally "frequently asked questions," very lightly paraphrased from actual queries in our inbox that we've temporarily or permanently banned for AI use.

"I am not confident in my English so I used AI for help with phrasing or translation."

All humans who follow the rules are welcome on /r/fantasywriters regardless of their level of English proficiency. Even if you think your English is "bad," we would still rather see your best attempt in English, rather than read GPT's best guess at what your Russian would look like if it were rendered in English.

"Why bother to remove my post for being AI-generated? The post I made was just posting a question / commenting on someone else's work, not posting part of my novel or asking for feedback on my writing."

The /r/fantasywriters policy against posting AI-generated content applies to everything posted to /r/fantasywriters, whether that's a picture, or a discussion question. People come to /r/fantasywriters to discuss fantasy writing with other humans, not to read posts that were written by AI.

"I asked a friend to edit my draft for me and I think they might have used AI"

You are responsible for all of the words that you post to /r/fantasywriters. If we accept "my friend did it" as an excuse for why you posted AI-generated content, then we don't have a policy that we can enforce.

"The ideas are 100% my own, the AI just helps me with phrasing. I want to be judged for my actual content, not my writing style."

Here on /r/fantaswriters, we are a community of writers. We believe that "phrasing" and "writing style" are the actual content.

That is why there are so many pieces of writing advice like "be careful with your adverb use" and "try to vary your sentence length." It's why writers care so much about "voice." As a community of writers, we understand that phrasing matters; voice is what makes your writing unique and recognizable. When you post something that is obviously written in GPT's voice rather than your own, people can and will notice.

"What parts of my writing made you think it was written by AI?"

We get this question a lot, including from accounts whose output is obviously 100% bot-generated. As a policy, we won't give you an itemized checklist of what caused us to identify your post as AI-generated. If we did this for every person who we banned for posting AI content, we would essentially be giving AI spammers a playbook for how to avoid our AI detection methods. That being said, while we don't intend to fully disclose the methods we use, we realize that some people are surprised to learn that "AI voice" is so clearly recognizable. To those people, we suggest reading Sam Kriss's piece in the New York Times, titled Why Does A.I. Write Like … That?. The /r/fantasywriters mod team does not endorse everything that Sam Kriss says, and his editorial doesn't capture or convey the full extent of our evaluation process, but he does a good job of explaining how "AI voice" has become so recognizable.

"I'm not using AI, but I'm worried about being falsely accused of using AI.

We believe that a human-written post being incorrectly flagged as AI is a much worse outcome than a few AI-generated posts slipping through the cracks, which is why we always err toward leniency in ambiguous cases. Every evaluation method we use is subject to this standard: if there's an evaluation method that results in human writing samples being flagged as AI written even 1 in 100 times, we won't use it. We can't promise a false positive rate that is literally zero, but we get as close as we reasonably can, and if you ever disagree with a moderation choice, you always have the ability to appeal our decision.

"How can you be confident that you're catching all of the AI posters?"

To be frank, we aren't confident in our ability to catch everyone posting AI content. As stated above, when considering evaluation methods, we put a higher priority on making sure that human content isn't incorrectly flagged as AI.

We have chosen to err on the side of leniency genuinely ambiguous cases, and that choice means that inevitably some AI-generated content will slip through the cracks.

We're also fully aware that there are models that are being trained specifically to avoid AI detection: there are literally thousands of public AI models, with new ones being released every day. However, we are still able to catch and remove a large number of AI-generated posts, because the majority of the AI-generated text is being generated by people who are fundamentally lazy, using the newest models in obvious ways that actually make them easier to catch.


r/fantasywriters Apr 30 '26

Mod Announcement Influx of AI generated images on r/fantasywriters.

1.5k Upvotes

There’s been a significant increase in AI generated art being posted in this subreddit.

Our stance is very clear on this and will remain as such: AI generated content is NOT welcome here, and that absolutely includes art.

Any type of AI slop will be REMOVED. Read the rule about this in our wiki


r/fantasywriters 5h ago

Brainstorming Why would a princess flee her castle/kingdom?

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I am creating a one-shot ttrpg campaign, and I am looking for a simple reason why a princess would flee her castle. The main quest is to search for the princess who was kidnapped, but it turns out she wasn't, and she fled on her own.

BUT, I am struggling to find the reason why she fled.

I have thought about it being love-related, but I decided against it because I am going to play with people who have had hard times in that area lately. I don't want it being about fleing to live a frowned-upon love, or escaping a forced marriage.

I don't want it to be too self-reflective either, because it might get too deep, and that is not the tone I want to get into.

Any ideas?

Edit: waw, thank you all for those great suggestions, I was not expecting that many answers so fast!! I will be looking at each of them, even if I don't answer. Thank you so much for taking the time to help me!


r/fantasywriters 6h ago

Question For My Story I'm writing a fantasy story with a nonlinear timeline, but I'm giving away the twist.

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My idea was that two legendary warriors are preparing for an upcoming war.

The first warrior is young and excited to be in his first war, and he holds a super rare sword that is the only one in existence.

The other warrior is also powerful but older, and somehow he also has that sword. No one knows it, but the twist is that they are the same person, just in different timelines, and these are two different wars.

Our warrior has changed sides for some reason because of something that happened between those 20 years.

I am trying to write it, but I keep giving it away. As soon as I try to give even a single hint, it feels like it's spoiled and revealed, and the story becomes uninteresting.

I wanted to show how the same person can feel so different in different time periods of their life and other things.
I would appreciate any help or ideas to pull it through!


r/fantasywriters 2h ago

Writing Prompt Let me interview your characters...!

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Writing prompt felt like the closest tag? I'm not used to so many rules, so my apologies if I'm breaking the etiquette around here ^_^;;

I thought this may be a fun collaborative activity for other fantasy writers. My character visits the dreams of people from other worlds and asks them about the world they live in, what their life is like, what problems they face, what kind of stories they have, etc. Or... sometimes they will just have an insightful conversation!

This is mostly for fun. I don't particularly plan to do anything with this story besides showing it to friends, maybe sharing online if I ever get the bravado to do so, but I will credit you for your character if you let me interview them even if I don't do anything with the story.

We could approach it in a few ways. It could be a roleplay, or I could simply pose my questions and you respond in character, anything is fine. The point is to display a wide variety of personalities from a wide variety of worlds with a wide variety of problems and stories.

So leave a comment if you want to do this just-for-fun project with me...!


r/fantasywriters 7h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Including the antagonists view

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I've read a few fantasy novels including the antagonist's view, and I'm curious about the community's thoughts on this. Not just the POV from morally grey characters as Joe Ambercrombie does, but the "big evil bad guy" themselves. How they see the world and the struggles they encounter. I don't mean a character in close proximity to them, like a henchman, but from their eyes.

Is this something that others find enjoyable? Do I risk giving away twists and ruining climactic scenes? Does anyone want to read about a character of which they find no common ground?

In the start of my novel, I started exploring that, but I'm beginning to doubt myself.


r/fantasywriters 8h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Mental barriers

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What are some of the biggest mental barriers you have experienced while writing?

I just noticed a couple minutes ago, after finishing my first book and nearing the end of my second. I would set a default of how many words I had per chapter.

I never realized until now, how much of a barrier, a crutch that was. I wasn't letting the story flow naturally because I set up a roadblock in my head.

Now that I have grown, learnt and let the story come naturally. I can write and not even think about how many words there are, which then by the end of the chapter, which then I have blown past my old "expectation"

I guess it is almost like repetition in working out. You give yourself a number of 12, then mentally, it is like a shut off valve.


r/fantasywriters 1h ago

Question For My Story For a character that has gone through suffering and pain through most of the story, what would be a fitting end for him?

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The character in question is the protagonist who has a martyr complex. He is an orphan but has 2 foster brothers whom he cares about very deeply. I have really thought about it, but need a different perspective on the final battle's ending which are is follows.

A) The Protagonist dies protecting his brothers and his new family. His soul actually gets a place amongst Gods for his sacrifices, and watches his brothers and takes care of them from up there indirectly. His ideologies of a perfect society now passed to his brothers which they do actually achieve.

B) The Gods requite the protagonists sacrifices because the cosmic scales of the protagonist's life hang heavily in debt. So they revive him back into the world to reunite with his brothers. With the suffering and pain the protagonist experienced before, he vows to make the society a better place so that no one alone would have to bear the burden the protagonist did before.

I have tried to decide an ending but ending (A) feels too sad and tragic, and ending (B) just feels off to me like something is missing as I'm it doesn't have much depth to it or maybe it's just me.


r/fantasywriters 6h ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Chapter 1 critique (High Fantasy, 1715 words)

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r/fantasywriters 7h ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Help with organisation

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Hello! i am going to cut straight to the topic, and it’s that I need serious help and advice on how to organize and plan my series. I know there is much to include (i have jumbled thoughts of around 100 pages on Word document). I have written the first novel but have to rewrite it, and I kind of know how this one would go (I am trying to figure out the transition to get to the end of this book and then the next). I am a plotter (I know this from my other book because even though I wrote it with what came to me in the moment, I had some idea of what I am doing-I guess that’s what you’d call a plotter; besides the point is that this is fantasy, and it needs to be planned out at least to some extent), so I need to know what happens.

When many things happen-and I feel completely blessed to have the ideas-how do you sort them into arcs? How do you make sure everything makes sense? It’s very appreciated!


r/fantasywriters 3h ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Critique prologue. [high fantasy][2,772 words]

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r/fantasywriters 6h ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Chapter 1 of 'Hagstone' [Low Fantasy, 2798 words]

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Hello all. Just posting an excerpt from a story I'm working on. It feels a little flat, and I'm hoping for specific feedback on the areas I'm trying to improve. The two things I'm focusing on are description to ground the reader and interiority to bring them closer to my POV character. I like where it's going, but I think it could benefit from your perspective. Be as harsh as you want. I'm not married to this piece and just want to improve it. I think my strengths as a writer are dialogue and conjuring believable people and relationships, but I'd really appreciate any advice/critique on how the dialogue comes across, too.

Thank you in advance and good luck with your own work.


r/fantasywriters 7h ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Chapter 1 of Clarion Call [Heroic Fantasy, 71,000 words total]

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Hi, so this is a redraft of Chapter 1. I hope you enjoy reading this!

This story focuses on my 2 MCs (15F and 14M) who are both maturing throughout this entire story and who both want to bring justice and peace to their own homelands.

The things that I'm curious about, in terms of feedback, are:

- This is the narration of my 15F MC, does it appear too formal and mature for someone of her age, even if she has survived through events that have forced her to grow up quicker?

- What are your impressions of her motivations and voice (I am trying to write her so that ambition is a particular flaw and I am unsure whether it is clear even from this chapter)

- Are there any points where I info-dump?

- Are there any other ways in which I should alter my prose?


r/fantasywriters 6h ago

Brainstorming I need some ideas for the plot progression of my fantasy story

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I'm working on a fantasy story and I have the beginning figured out, but I'm struggling with where the plot should go from there. I'd love to hear basically any ideas you have, even small ones.

The story starts with a boy living in a village in the desert. He goes climbing in the nearby mountains and discovers a hidden cave. Inside, he finds a very old girl who is capable of magic. She has been asleep for an extremely long time and has no memories whatsoever.

The important part is that the girl herself is an ancient weapon of mass destruction and she has been put to sleep in this cave.

I've already written a journey where the boy travels with her while she's still asleep. They're eventually heading toward a kingdom that exists inside a giant water dome. I have tried to use the volcanoes in the kingdom and somehow use their heat/energy to awaken her.

However, I don't really like the volcano idea anymore. It feels too arbitrary, and I'd like a more interesting reason for them to go there and a more interesting way for her to awaken.

I'm also having trouble figuring out the larger progression of the story. I don't really have a final heroic ending yet, and I don't want it to just become a generic "ancient superweapon wakes up and destroys everything" story.

Also, there's a war between two large empires, an empire of earth and an empire of the sky.

So I'm looking for any ideas you might have:

- What could cause her to awaken?

- Why was she put to sleep in the first place?

- What ideas do you have to do with her memories?

- What could the underwater kingdom have to do with her?

- Possible plot twists or revelations

- Factions that might want to find/use/kill her

- Things that could happen during their journey

- How her powers could work

- What the original purpose of creating her was

- And especially: what could eventually lead to a satisfying heroic ending?

I'm not necessarily looking for one complete plot. I'm happy to take small ideas and combine them into something myself.


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Is this just how writers are supposed to feel-or am I broken?

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I’m not sure how to explain clearly, sorry if this seems choppy, I’m about mid-breakdown currently.

I’ve always wanted to write stories, like scribbled out ideas, plots and very specific details-but I have ADHD and I could never figure out how to get my brain to function- but now I have (that’s a different topic) but I’m about 3000 paragraphs into a story. I’ve been hunched over my iPad for days, it’s obsessive. I’ve barely eaten, like I’m down 8 pounds-haven’t eaten, I haven’t done a single chore sans caring for my animals, even my husband is starting to worry because my shoulders and my neck are absolutely killing me and I can’t stop. I fall asleep holding my iPad and wake up with more to write. The problem is that I CARE. So very deeply about the characters-I have to get their story out, it has to end well, they have to be ok. to the point that I am sobbing when I absolutely have to stop. I’m terrified if I stop that my brain will just stop working like it is now, like I won’t be able to get them back or focus long enough to. This is the most I’ve ever managed to do and I know they’re not real-like real life real-but they feel real. I feel like I have fought for them, suffered with them, healed with them- it’s so guttural, so visceral that even I’m a bit worried-is it normal? I feel like I’m pouring my entire soul into something and then there is ONE line that I just can’t stop thinking about. I didn’t really think it up or fit it into the story, it feels like the characters themselves gave it to me- which probably sounds ridiculous but it’s best way to say it- it just feels like they said it not me but my brain needs it, my heart FEELS it. I do not one to share this line currently, but it just feels so- unreal- to be so broken. Is this writing? Is this how real writers and authors feel?

I share everything with my husband-but I can’t show him this story, I just can’t. It feels like it’s the only piece of magic I’ve ever made-or even ever felt-in my whole life.


r/fantasywriters 21h ago

Brainstorming How to take what we like about ensemble casts and apply it to political and court drama?

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The way that I write my political intrigue fantasy dramas that take place in a cluster of republics and kingdoms is broken up like Law& Order, with half of the story being about investigation and the other half being about deliberation. But I don't want every courtroom drama to actually be a courtroom. So I've been thinking about how story logic already loves a good ensemble cast and I could use that to play around with a couple different ways to make a drama out of people voting.

Power Couple / Buddy Cop / Odd Couple

Power Trio / Three Amigos

Four Temperaments / Four Philosophies

Five Man Band / Five Philosophies (Sixth Ranger)

Six Friends / Commedia Dell'Arte

Magnificent Seven / The Crew

With each of these ensemble types, there is an inherent "hidden character" in the group itself, where you may care about a few of the members, but you also deeply care about the GROUP existing itself, staying whole, staying balanced. There's even anticipation to be gained watching one person leave and another person who fits that role coming in. Or watching someone grow from having a dependent position to becoming a leader in the group.

So, I wanted to applying this to juries, committees, voting, and decision-making.

Like, Right now I'm writing a story about a high priestess sending her niece with a gaggle of church troops to force a group of gentry landowners to give up 20% of their land by ecclesiastical rights to the church. This group of farmers have got to decide what to do about this, So I want to apply the logic of one of these ensemble types to them in order to ease along how they're going to make this decision.

Or, one of the final stories will be two partners who have spent my entire series working together, basically a Sherlock and Watson dynamic, going after the same position after getting their mentor taken out of her position with a vote of no confidence.

Another will be a jury of background characters deciding the fate of my main antagonist. I have researched the film 12 Angry Men, one of the best examples of this.

Any feedback that you have in mind on how you would see the use of ensemble types being used for political intrigue and decision making drama?


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic magic for its own sake or for a narrative purpose

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I shared my story idea with someone recently and they asked a question that kind of threw me off. My story is a fantasy setting (swords and shit, limited use of magic by humans but definite presence of mystical forces and things like demons/ghosts).

The person I was talking to asked what narrative purpose the magic in my story served--like basically, you could transplant the core elements of the story idea to the real world and have that story be a fiction piece rather than fantasy. They seemed to think there needs to be a reason for the magic/fantasy elements beyond serving as a general metaphor for or physical manifestation of power/force, and beyond just being part of the setting and vibe of the story.

In my concept, demons and ghost/demonic possession serve as a manifestation or metaphor for generational trauma and violent extremism (I know it's not the most original, I'm just tryna write something) but that didn't seem to be good enough to justify a magical setting, in their eyes.

I guess I agree stories are better or can be more powerful and interesting when this is the case, but can't really think of too many actual examples. And I don't agree that my story should just take place in the real world, because the whole point is that I want to write a fantasy story lol. I have tried to think of what this would even look like in books I've read and come up short.

Does anyone have any examples where this might be the case, or thoughts on this? Like Lord of the Rings could probably take place in the real world and just be a historical fiction or spec fic World War story or something but that's not the point? I feel crazy.


r/fantasywriters 23h ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Chapters 1-9 of Ascendria [High Fantasy, 11000 words]

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https://docs.google.com/document/d/10T70siAzczkiDxBNKvWTQT9iOXeUnWgOyc72n0zbdSo/edit?usp=sharing

Hi Reddit, this is the very first draft of a high/epic science fantasy I am working on. I cannot emphasize enough that this is a first draft so I am looking for feedback on just about everything. Perhaps its quite long so feel free to read as much or as little as you like.

The novel is intended as a high concept, mythic narrative centred around a world ruled by a supercivilization of god-like magical beings, whose ambitions stretch far into the cosmos, and the relatively ordinary people they share the world with, whose knowledge and culture may in fact hold far more secrets and knowledge than they think. I hope you at least enjoy reading it!


r/fantasywriters 23h ago

Question For My Story Titles for military character jobs

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Hey there! I am struggling a bit to find the right type of position for some of my characters. It is a court setting with a war breaking out and I need some more ideas on what to call general positions. What can they be generals of? Or some other (high ranking) military positions or titles would also be very useful. Does anybody have tips for other important roles on court and in war? Would very much appreciate help :)
I have tried using the general of the city guard and general of the army but that just feels so vague. I want the setting to be as realistic as possible and accurate in lore. If someone has some research or knowledge of good writing for war settings I would very much appreciate!!


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Critique My Story Excerpt Chronicles of Villis Sordes, The System. Chapter 3, Pages 3-8 [Dark Fantasy, 2047 words]

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That rancid rodent slowly snaked his way out of his armoured chariot, his face sat still, unmoved by the welcoming party before him. He wasn’t focused on them at all. I watched as his head slowly turned, taking in everything around him. Sorting through the Corpus Automata, the guardsman that welcomed him, past the crumbling buildings which surrounded the Barrons Court till I felt his gaze land upon me. Our eyes met.

I was frozen.

I swore I heard drums, a low thumping echoing in my ears. The Rat stood towering over me, our eyes locked for what felt like aeons before he offered me a nod. Breaking away as he marched forwards, his small militia in line marched to the barracks. He saw me… it was fine I told myself. But deep in my stomach I could feel a knot tying itself. 

“Well who do we have ‘er? DULDROM!” Snaggletooth's voice called out above the sound of steel boots marching, She was loud enough to drown out all the other blasted sounds which surrounded me. 

They all came from the front gates of the Baron’s residence, Gor walked just behind Snaggletooth, a blank expression sat upon his face. Hawkins? He followed off to the side just further behind, his brow knitted together, and arms bound up tight. Then Cerilla… her arms were crossed, breathing heavy, her eyes shot daggers at Snaggletooth. 

Snaggletooth had her head held high, though her body seemed stiff, “Seems ye’ not the only one tagging along with us now Grey.” she said.

“How do you mean?” I asked her. 

As they got closer I heard an etching sound in the air, the sound of a quill scribbling against parchment. Cerilla redirected her glare to the noise over her shoulder, standing behind her my eyes could only widen as I saw what followed her was a Nodari.

She was short, shorter than Snaggletooth, just reaching her shoulder. Her head shaved till a faint stubble lined it, her face blank of anything tangible to an expression. “Ye’ gone to need to forgive the lass. She’s a shy one.” Snaggletooth spoke as I stepped up the join the company. Yet she still did not acknowledge me. Aside from halting her march.

“Duldrom, you?”

“Tik”

Her eyes did not even glance in my direction.

“Purpose?”

“Documentation.”

It seemed to me that she was one of my own.

“Of?”

“Irrelevant”

I knew her purpose, to be sent along for documentation. She was no threat so long as I held my tongue. I turned back to Snaggletooth. She hadn’t stopped for any of us, marching forwards with a great sense of purpose; though fortunately being much taller than her I’d meet her in a few strides. “So Duldrom. Our deal?” She was straight into it, like a hot knife through butter. “How could I forget? I can report that I’ve gathered ‘updated’ information.” Her one good eye was glaring at me. Was she carefully evaluating me? Or had she already reached some kind of conclusion. “Updated eh? Well I was hopin’ for something new, so this er’ update better be fuckin’ good Grey.”

“It’s about Cecil.”

“Oh for fuck sakes.”

Her brow knitted itself together, she was pinching the corner of her eyes between her index and thumb. “Can ye’ tell me the update is that the bloody bastard got snatched up by ‘em Murder?”. Her eyes hung on me, they were scared, or perhaps worried was the right word. The exact sense is hard to point down, it almost felt lost. I could only shake my head in dismay, she was worried; that much was plain to see. “He’s changing Snaggletooth. More than anything should.”

She stood there and I could see her taking in One. Large. Deep. Breath. Looking around, I saw Gor, his face was solemn. Hawkins stood, his back straightened and his eyes staring forwards almost like he was looking into a great abyss . And Cerilla? She was shaking, her eyes rushing around in search. 

All while Tik stood there, that incessant scribbling continued to sound out. My eyes hung on the Nodling for some moment, “Don’t you be worrying about her Grey. She’s fine with me” Snaggletooths word, I knew by now that this was absolute.  

“And everyone else?” I asked her.

“They agree with me as well. Now lets get a fuckin’ move on.” Snaggletooth shut down in one breath.  I wanted to say something at that moment, yet I’ve already danced upon our rules. I wanted to keep it at a pothole. I had to give the women some credit, you could think her to be like a bull in a pottery shop, yet in reality she too knew how to dance.

Snaggletooth didn’t even acknowledge us, yet we followed through constricting streets, deeper and deeper and the light slowly began to darken. It felt hard to breathe, barely anyone was making a sound. Heavy lungs, almost like they were filled with water, the knot tightened.

“Wait! Snaggletooth, just hold on a moment.” I called out before lunging out to grab onto her shoulder.

“YOU CAN’T BE FUCKIN’ SERIOUS!”  She screamed out a deafening screech. Make it stop, MAKE it stop, MAKE IT stop, MAKE IT STOP! IN RYLOCKS NAME PLEASE MAKE IT STOP!

“Duldrom?” Snaggletooth was confused, her face turned to me, it sat calm. And as I looked into her eyes I could tell she was tired, she carried a face created by the horrors which we are never told about as kids.

“Are ye’ holdin’ me up for a reason? I need a fuckin’ drink.” As she spoke I could hear that faint scribbling from Tik persisted. I felt naked, a cold wind blowing against me making my body shiver. What was that? Even now I struggle to understand. The mind numbing screech in my ear drums eventually faded, my sanity returning to me.

“Oh… don’t worry”, I affirmed.

From there? Not a word spoken, the woman simply continued marching, and for whatever reason we continued to follow her forwards. 

Trudging along wet brick. 

Her nose was carrying her, she had sharp senses. It had been close to a month now that I had been travelling with this woman. I had my doubts, with having spent ⅙ of my lifetime having not seen one. Yet now there was no doubt about it, her dialect and her stature, her natural sense of authority which she seemed to carry with her. Fewer people, born in recent times, have never met a Sordesian. Even before collapse, Sordesians stuck largely to their snow capped homes which even from here I could see stretching high into the skies. They were told to be born with a sharp nose, all to sniff out ore through earth and rock. I wasn’t imagining it. Guided by her, I knew that she was one of them.

Till eventually she brought us to a courtyard.

Much like the days of old, it was filled with life.

Small orbs of light were strung along walls, a faint humming sitting alongside music. The lute was rather lovely, the viol at points bringing vulnerability, the drums dragging dust up from the well trodden grounds. This is what I remembered, from those far off days of youth, I’m reminded of the harvest festival. The dancing and merriment, this is what it felt like; It had been so long…

I stood beside her, my eyes were stretched wide, I could feel my cheeks tugging a grin along my face. Yet when I looked at Snaggletooth all I could see was her eyes scanning the party which took place before us. Silent, till finally she’d reach her arm back, Gor produced a bottle of Varkonian wine. “You can all go enjoy ‘ye selves. I’ll run introductions.” before approaching ones who I could only assume to be the hosts.

We all stood there amidst a party, in the music and chatter, listening to laughter and merriment. All while the incessant scribbling continued to sit in the background. Cerilla in that moment was sniffing the air herself, seeming to pick out the scent of booze amongst the mix. All while Hawkin’s felt far too stiff, his brow furrowed, sweat beading upon his forehead. It seemed like anyone needed the drink more, it was him. Gor? What now feels unsurprising had joined the music and dance. 

In times like these? I did my job better with a drink in me.

Approaching the bar there sat a good cloister of patrons, together in banter, meanwhile sitting separate like a sore thumb sat Cerilla. In this moment she appeared as a light to this unknown abyss. She had her mug filled with the malty, amber mixture, a ‘warmth’ amidst this darkened world, a firm mug of Sordesian ale. 

“Can I get you another round friend?” I asked the woman as she sat there, her head hung low. “If you insist...” Her voice had shrunk compared to her argument with Hawkins’ upon horseback. I held two fingers to the barkeep, within moments we had two tall foaming mugs sitting in front of us.

“To crossed paths, I’m lucky to have met a friend such as you.” I spoke in earnest, to find someone so calm and calculated in the throws of death is a blessing. Especially when they’re the one saving your life, so what was it? What had gotten her to crumble in such a way? I had to know. I held my mug in the air for cheers, she left me ignored; she’d just sat there sipping.

“Mandaran, can you excuse yourself?” She was cold.

“I’m afraid not my friend. It pales me to see you this way. It is unlike you”, So I tried to be warm.

The woman scoffed in my face as those words left my lips. “Cut the shit Duldrom Grey. We aren’t friends. You’re just a crony for cronies.” That. That stuck out to me like a sore thumb, “What? Do you mean to tell me you all don’t operate independently? Perhaps to Snake Eyes?” As I asked her this I could hear a sharp exhale shooting from her nostrils, before taking a long, hard, sip, of ale.

“More like this entire blasted system constructed around us.” The statements dampened the air of the celebration slightly, though it was good to know that amidst all this I was not alone in my feelings of it all. “What has the system constructed around you Cerilla?” The woman could only rub her forehead at my question, “...And endless march Mandaran. One long endless march indeed. Till I'm gored, crying for my mother and father. Or till I don’t obey as I’m supposed to and my head ends up as pieces on the floor.” She was a poor mind, I saw what was becoming on her. The illusions of your youth begin to fade and you come to terms with just how cruel Sordes is. “Cerilla, you are not alone in the path in which you walk.” I tried to comfort her, reaching out to her shoulder in a show of solidarity. “Don’t you touch me Mandaran.” My hand froze, sweat beading on my forehead. “You know nothing of the path we walk. Now fuck off.” The woman was blunt, it was hard to believe she shared banners with Telladay. I did not want to overstay my welcome so I excused myself, back out into the masses which filled the courtyard with a tankard clutched closely to me.  

Though some of the abyss had been filled I still only found myself with further questions. As fireworks screamed out, these poor minds which have endured so much simply continued to dance, eat and drink. Though I had questions I wanted answered I could only stand there in a stupor at it all. Till from behind I felt a hand grab my shoulder; I couldn’t help but think I heard a knock knock knock. Turning to face my assailant I was greeted by a man, he stood tall, he had a narrow facial structure, his hair brushed back, his eyes dull. 

“Can I help you?” As I asked him this question, he simply kept a firm hold upon my shoulder. Whilst a slight smile formed along his lips.


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic How do you feel about flashback chapters?

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Let’s say there’s this whole scene between an immortal and the governing body of the universe: they are accusing him of destroying a universe (amongst other things): as a suicide attempt. The immortal, not feeling the need to explain himself because it happened millennia ago. Not a single one of them was alive back then. And the incident what led to the destruction was only witnessed by one other being: a demigod.

A few chapters later the incident is retold.

Annoying? Or a “So that’s what actually happened!” moment, and your view of the protagonist slightly shifts?

I’m trying this in my first draft, it mostly works. But some flashbacks are a bit further into the book.


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Critique My Idea Feedback for my main villain's death. Is this a copout? [Sword and Sorcery]

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I'm considering a Sword and Sorcery project, about a group of heroes questing to kill a warlord who supposedly can't be killed. He's from a mostly extinct race of modestly sized giants (about 12 feet) and a sorcerer, though more in the Sauron soft magic kind of way, rather than casting lightning bolts. He's so insanely bloodthirsty that he almost always leads his armies from the front, just so he can do his own killing. Supposedly he has never been injured, and stories have it that he has found some way to simply ward himself from all injury.

The heroes chase faint rumors of an ancient weapon that can supposedly do the deed, and the plot is largely about this search. Eventually they infiltrate his domain, and get to the ruins of a fortress on a small spit by the ocean, where the weapon is hidden. They find nothing there, and the overlord arrives in person. He mocks them, and says that HE started the rumors of the weapon in the first place, to mislead anyone looking to assassinate him. AND so he'd have some fun people to kill: Anyone who made it this far would have to be pretty tough.

(See, he's not a rational conqueror who wants to establish Sauron-style oppressive order. He's more of a chronically violent maniac who can never stop waging wars.)

After this point, I have two ideas:

a) The heroes just grit their teeth and go "Fine. We'll kill you anyway!" And they fight him, and through sheer grit, skill and teamwork they managed it. Turns out he never was invulnerable, just really, really tough.

b) They fight him, and indeed can't really harm him. But they remember that the one battle he didn't personally take part in was a naval battle. And he's huge and beefy and overall very heavy. That is, not the slightest bit buoyant. So it ends with them knocking him into the sea, where he just sinks like a rock and drowns.

Either way, the point is kind of that there is always less to evil than it makes out.

EDIT: Option c) occurred to me. A bit of a mix of a) and b). So, the overlord has cast spells and made dark deals with otherworldly entities that ensure he "cannot be harmed by any weapon, cut by tooth nor claw, nor burnt by fire!". So when the magic weapon turns out to be a dud, the heroes just fight him really, really hard, and manage to steer him towards a ledge, then push him over. See, the ground isn't a weapon, and his spells do nothing to save him from a 300 foot drop.

The idea is sort of for sheer human grit and courage and skill to save the day, in place of some divine weapon.


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Question For My Story How do I get into the writing of my story and introducing everything?

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I have a fully developed world, but I am a beginner to the writing side of writing. Big part I know. Anyway, I have characters and a magic system but no way of putting it down on the paper. I have tried to plan everything meticulously, I have tried just writing with no plan. Neither of them quite worked for me. Should I just muscle through one of those? Is there another way? What other things can I do to improve my writing while also not hating it? I just want to get my story out there in the world, but I can’t do that without feeling disappointed or frustrated. I’m frequently bored when trying to write it. Did I miss something? That’s what I want to know. Also if I am in the wrong place please let me know.


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Discussion About A General Writing Topic Word Count Question

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Word Count question

Im currently writing my first actual novel, though I have written fanfiction before. Like, a lot.

For context, when I started writing in 2012 my chapters were 500-2000 words long. And my writing style was abysmal to be frank. Then in 2020 I took a bunch of writing classes online and fixed my writing style.

The fanfiction I published after that is currently over 600k words and only halfway done.

Now, realistically I know there is no damn way someone is gonna ever read a book at 600k words. I dont even think that can be printed. And honestly its quite easy to get lost with thay many words.

Im currently 22 chapters into a 70 chapter novel, which will be one of 6 books in the story. Each chapter has between 2000 and 4000 words.

Depending on the chapter and POV (as i have multiple character POVs) i feel like it could be longer just for world building purposes. But at the same time I feel like the book will be much too long if I do that.

What are your opinions? As it is i realized the story i wanted to tell needed more than the 3 books I originally planned, and doubled the total for the series. I dont think the story itself needs more than 6 books but the worldbuilding might suffer. I realized today while writing that I never even fully established in the book that its a world with floating islands, though it kind of pops up in hints every now and then

Please give me any advice you have 🙏🙏🙏


r/fantasywriters 1d ago

Brainstorming I have tried to find a tangible concepts of Mana or Magical Energy on my fantasy settings

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I am creating a fantasy world where mana or magic is part of nature itself rather than a supernatural phenomenon. Where the world consists of three particles—particle, anti-particle, and super-particle; which this super-particle is magic itself, it is able to affect particles to behave in a very specific way so it able to creates something like forces an air particle to combust—which therefore create fire, a fire spell.

Because of this complexity, I am seriously confused about how can creatures and human manipulate this super-particle or magic, do they produce it like energy (ATP) from our body for examples, if yes what organ produces it, or do the human cells just have a new components on them since magic just messes up everything. Then also, what the hell is mana then, it's a magical Energy, is it a broad term which is something that has the ability to do work or cause change, or is it its own thing, like a form of energy rather than a whole new term. Then what about raw mana, what form does it possess, etc.

My general problem is how humans manipulate mana, do they produce it, or they only manipulate it through a medium. Though I want to put a concept where every living being possesses a certain amount of Mana in them, but like I said before, wtf is mana anyway??

I want to create a complex system that works, but ended up confusing myself.

Sorry if this is confusing, I have tried brainstorming, thinking about tangible concepts and a solution, it just never appears to me.