r/poetry_critics Aug 21 '25

A Recommended Read Your Mobile Solution - Silly Informative Poem

30 Upvotes

Formatting with soft line break enjambment is the #1 issue I see you guys struggling with on here. Since so many of you insist on submitting via phone instead of desktop (or at least using Desktop Mode on your phone), I decided to have some fun with it and wrote a little ditty to help you out.

I'm also including Neutrinoprism's Quick Guide to Poem Formatting on Reddit found in the side panel for additional suggestions (not all of which currently or consistently work).

Matting, clustered, fucked-up prose\ Broken stanzas, enjambment woes?\ Too hard to enter soft line breaks?\ Are comments about these mistakes?

Are you the kind to use your phone,\ -to submit your latest poem?\ Well, look no further than this rhyme,\ "\+Enter" to end the line!

This works, you see, plain as day.\ I've had my fun, with little to say.\ It worked for me, and now you know\ My work here's done, off I go...


r/poetry_critics Feb 13 '24

Moderator post On enforcing the "2-critiques per poem" rule. - A community-driven approach!

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As the vote concluded in favour of keeping the rule, users with more than 2.500 combined subreddit karma can now use the keyword !remove to remove posts!

A mod-mail with a link to the user, using the keyword and the removed post, will be sent to us.

As we obviously can´t manually review each removal (nor manually remove each violation ourselves - that´s what this is for), we trust that the threshold of 2.500 karma guarantees that only active, qualified members of the community may remove posts (and in a responsible manner).

What is the general feedback in the sub with this approach? Please, let us know in the comments of this post so we can tweak and fine-tune it if needed!

Thank you,

let´s make this place awesome together,

Lucca :)


r/poetry_critics 1h ago

Never Enough

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It shouldn’t be this hard to
be the man I am.
 
I have a family that cares,
but that reminds me
 
of how I fuck everything up.
 
I’d love to get this right, but I can’t.
 
I thought I wanted it all,
but all is never enough.
 
I tried so hard to make it.
 
I met with the devil
so I could sell my soul.
 
As soon as I walked in,
he told me to leave
and I was not worth the flames.
 
I thought I could use some time alone,
but everything I hate finds its way in.
 
Now, cluster-phobia is all I have
to hold me down to earth.
 
I’m so fucked.


r/poetry_critics 17m ago

Sensitive Content OPINION

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¿Cual creen que es mejor?

INCENDIO DE BOLSILLO.

Busco un incendio perdido

en los bolsillos de mi abrigo.

Si lo ven no alcen la voz,

pues se asusta fácilmente.

Es a la vista inofensivo

y pequeño como un ratón,

mas hay oculto en su temblor

un secreto iridiscente.

Busco un incendio perdido

entre los pliegues del reloj

creo que el granuja se escapó

al cruzar por aquel puente.

Busco, mi incendio perdido

lo necesito urgentemente,

pues a él confié el timón

de mi impaciente corazón.

VERSION 2

Busco un incendio perdido

en los bolsillos de mi abrigo.

Si lo ven no alcen la voz,

pues se asusta fácilmente.

Es a la vista inofensivo

y pequeño como un ratón,

mas hay oculto en su temblor

un secreto iridiscente.

Busco un incendio perdido

si lo ven avisenme,

se llevó el timón de mi sentido

y siento naufragar la mente.

Busco, lo busco con tesón,

lo necesito urgentemente,

pues a él confié la suerte

de mi impaciente corazón.


r/poetry_critics 40m ago

Dear Person

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Dear Person,

I never knew how exhausting it was

How exhausting someone's mere existence can be

Someone you just met

Someone you needed an outlet on

Your feelings had been bombarded

Your thoughts are overwhelming

Your emotions are overpowering

There's no room for other people's worries

But you need an outlet to relieve your agonies

Just when I thought I found my match

You just needed someone to have your back

Just when I thought I found my world

You just needed someone to hold your own

I'm sorry for my complaints and dissatisfaction

When I should've been your ear for listen

Should've kept my mouth shut and let you talk

Because the problems you have, will not demise

I'll sit here for your comfort, I'll even hold your hand

Until these problems are officially dealt with again.


r/poetry_critics 6h ago

Dusk and Dawn

2 Upvotes

We dont get along

Had it been from the very start 

Nuances and whispers

The thought of you

Was what I pursued

I perceive and give the rest to you

I get half and you get full

At dusk your poems subdue

Grey-looking and hardly anew

I had never really met you,

All I saw was your face glistening 

On the oceans surface

Dazzling eyes looking afar

Separate we shall be, and-

So, if the Sun calls you one last time

Remember to wave from afar


r/poetry_critics 2h ago

The blame game

1 Upvotes

Blame is a loaded gun

Passed hand to hand

In rooms where truth

Gets smothered in sand.

It points at mirrors,

Dodges facts,

Builds up walls

Then calls them acts.

You blame your mother,

She blames her dad,

He blames the bottle

For the rage he had.

We throw it like knives,

Play victim or judge,

But no one heals

When no one budges.

Blame is a mask

For the pain we hide,

A way to bleed

Without losing pride.

Sometimes it’s earned,

Sometimes it’s not,

But holding it tight

Just leaves you to rot.

You want release?

Then call it out.

Name the wounds—

But drop the doubt.

Own what’s yours,

Let go what ain’t.

Blame won’t save you.

But truth? It just might.


r/poetry_critics 2h ago

Survival Mode

1 Upvotes

SURVIVAL MODE

BY VKV

I wake, not to thrive—but to last through the day,

With breath like a whisper that won’t blow away.

Teeth clenched, mind racing, no time to explain,

Each step is a bargain I strike with the pain.

I eat just enough, I speak just in code,

Eyes scanning for exits down every road.

There’s no time for softness, no space to unfold—

My heart is on lockdown, my fire on hold.

Smiles come in flashes, then vanish like mist,

Joy feels like a rumor I once almost kissed.

People say, “You’re strong,” but don’t see the toll—

I’m not trying to flourish, just patch up the soul.

Still…

In the silence, I simmer, not shatter or fade,

There’s power in choosing what doesn’t degrade.

This isn’t my ending—it’s not even close—

Survival’s a season, not the life I chose.

So I walk through the shadow, a flicker inside,

Not winning, not losing—just staying alive.


r/poetry_critics 2h ago

1st of September

1 Upvotes

i lost my mind in the italian heat,

now i’m scribbling down words that you’ll never read

i see god in everything, birds and clouds and trees in spring

i see god in you, with your back to me at morning’s brink 

i don’t like to use the word “l*ve”, i’ve used it too many times before, back then i couldn’t grasp it and i still cannot

so i search for another diagnosis that would explain why i am a ship and you are the ocean,

why the corners of your lips are attached by strings to my insides,

and when you smile all is well,

and when you cry my guts thrash and rip through my abdominal wall and i can’t stand up again, blood, blood everywhere, mucus and bile

we lay next to each other,

and we’re both drunk enough to make mistakes,

and i could be yours but you’d never be mine,

i settle for a compromise, to dream of your lips but never touch them

a friendship’s never enough, but i fear your absence too much to bet it all on a wild horse galloping towards the sunset

when you’re gone i find you at the bottom of a bottle,

or inside a rolled up bill,

or in a song about a forlorn lover,

so dreadfully alienated in the company of nameless girls and shapeless friends,

who pity the scars on my skin but never reach inside them

i am an unanswered prayer in an hour of need

you are cruelty disguised as negligence

i am jacked up prices for condoms in the early hours of the morn 

you are the south sudan famine, you are the cure for cancer and a flash flood that killed 46 miners, you are a volunteer firefighter and a perverted taxidermist 

you shift tides and change the weather,

you change me, but not for the better

summer’s ending so i’m shedding skin

but if you call, i’m yours still


r/poetry_critics 12h ago

(Beginner) The Moon

4 Upvotes

After so many days, I finally saw the moon.
She doesn't know how beautiful she looks from here.
I can only gaze at her from afar
And whisper sweet words into the night,
knowing she will never hear them.
Because somehow, she makes my night feel less dark.

​When our eyes meet,
Time stands still,
And I get lost somewhere inside.

​'Moon' is just the name we gave her,
But what is her real name?
I want to know that,
But I cannot go there—
Because she is the moon.


r/poetry_critics 6h ago

What Will Happen If I Don't?

1 Upvotes

I’m always counting

Counting the songs that I sing

Counting the things that I do

What will happen if I don’t?

Nothing, nothing, nothing

But

 

What if? What if? What if?

What if you die? What if I die? What if everything goes wrong?

Except it won’t

And I know that

I know that you know that I know that

But what will happen if I don’t?

 

 

You use it as an adjective

Because it makes you feel prickly

If you don’t

But what will happen if you don’t?

How many people are going to die?

How long will you keep your fingers crossed, while playing Car Park Roulette?

How many nights will you spend hot and uncomfortable, because you don’t want to breathe their air?

 

 

I want to breathe

 

I want to breathe and I want it to feel like it’s good for me

I want to breathe and I want it to hurt with cold

I want to breathe and I want it to sting like a song of safety

I want the type of air that feels glacial

Like the oxygen itself is historical

Not school air that I protect myself against with the sleeve of my blazer

Not school air that matts your hair because it’s wet and there isn’t enough circulation

 

 

I have to count, because if I don’t, if I don’t, if I don’t

 

One time is safe, and normal, and good

 

Two times is an accident, but it’s safe, and normal, and good

 

Three times is lucky, third times a charm

 

Three times is Hellfire and evil and far, from the safety that comes from...

 

Four times, is where you stop, if you can, and if you can’t, you stop at...

 

Ten times, is too much, no coincidence, no luck, and by...

 

Thirteen times, you know that you’re stuck

 

 

If you continue, who knows when you’ll stop

When you’re trapped in a cycle of repeat, repeat, repeat

 

 

So that’s why I count, because if I don’t bad things will happen, but if I do

I don’t know if I’ll stop


r/poetry_critics 13h ago

THE COURTROOM INSIDE ME

3 Upvotes

THE COURTROOM INSIDE ME

There is a courtroom inside me

that never closes.

Every mistake

is evidence.

Every hesitation,

a confession.

And I am always

the accused.

I stand before myself

and wait for the sentence.

Sometimes

a small mistake

becomes a lifetime.

Sometimes

I punish myself

until I no longer recognize

the person I am punishing.

Then suddenly—

a shake of the head,

a breath,

the room around me—

and I return.

But the judge is still there,

waiting for the next mistake.

I keep collecting victories

like evidence for my defense:

See?

I am capable.

See?

I am not nothing.

But perhaps

I was never meant

to spend my life

proving my innocence.

Perhaps one day

I will walk out of this courtroom—

not acquitted,

not condemned,

just free.


r/poetry_critics 9h ago

I don't know exactly what this community is, but I want to become a writer and I don't know how to go about it; if this isn't the right place, could you help me?

1 Upvotes

"And he said stop, don't even think about it, he said no, Kip it can't be, you can't do it, but even though he muttered these words, it was already too late. He left it to the solitude, to the darkness; he vanished into the horror. He could no longer bring it back, he could not grieve over this, he had to move on. It wasn't his closest, nor was it his enemy, and it wasn't a nobody either. Then what was it? Apparently, the subject, Vinson, had lost his mind. We couldn't touch him anymore. It was left to him, and his final prayer was silence. Because he killed the nobody, was that why, I wonder? It was over, everything was over; fate was over, this was the end. This time it was the end, it was clear from Kip's eyes, from the way he stared into the distance, as if screaming 'it's my fault'. Not a single tear fell from his eyes because he was strong, born of a strength that would never bow down, and then the pistol fired. When the sound of the gunshot, firing without hesitation, merged with the wet walls of the cave, it blasted out towards freedom."


r/poetry_critics 18h ago

Peace at Night, Chaos in the Day

5 Upvotes

Peace at night
Chaos in the day

Reflecting and unwinding
But Struggling to settle

Alone and calm
Together but wound

Sirens…
Silence…

Static…
White Noise…

I dream of rest
But restless I am
What's to come next?

The peace of the night is rewarding 
The bread of the day is kneaded by chaos

Not knowing what's next boils
But knowing it will settle steams

Gratitude for the chaos
Brings the peace at night

I have not written or even thought about poetry for a long time. Probably since I was in middle school 20 years ago. For whatever reason I got into it tonight and really enjoyed it. It felt good to put my thoughts down on paper in an abstract way.

Any advice on forming habits, tips and feedback on poetry would be appreciated. This is a feeling I’d like to chase. Thank you!


r/poetry_critics 14h ago

Explanation

1 Upvotes

The push and pull of explanation triggers me -

sometimes quiet, sometimes overexplaining.

There is never a balance.

And somewhere between the two,

my confidence gets smashed up into pieces.

Self-doubt enters the game,

along with guilt

And I am left with nothing but

a growing disrespect for my hardwork

and uncertainty about my future.

Ruining my present is this word - Explanation.

A word that is useless to the ears as the brain works faster in their case,

assuming what they want to;  shattering my heart, which begs me to restart

with self-love, confidence and quietness.


r/poetry_critics 22h ago

Please pick it apart as you please…

5 Upvotes

Nothing in the bars

I go to bars and parties
Shoulders touch, hands pull me in
The eyes meet …
I see the fire in their eyes
Against the cold in mine

Frozen in a time
Forgotten even by me
All their gaze and lips
Seems to fail
The fault Lies within

I am accustomed to the holy
Nothing is ever enough
I try to run in nights
To run in your ghosts in alleys

I keep on waiting for you to beat your heart
Again
Time and time again I pray for rain to drench me
But even then I wander the desert of your eyes
Forever destined to be lost
Like many chapters in your books
Now i will lay by the grave
Of what could have been


r/poetry_critics 1d ago

new to poetry! Seeking advice!

8 Upvotes

Can I only rhyme a little? I’m new to poetry and trying assonance and alliteration so, all advice is appreciated!

Untitled

Where would someone fit in the folds of two day old laundry?

I think two days is fine,
If it’s in no one’s way but mine.

Could I explain empty frames on display?

Or the heart shaped wreath that hung year round?

Okay okay, I guess you can come inside.

But you can’t sit there,
I’ve only made room for the sun.

and no,
The cats are not truly fighting,
That’s just how they have fun.

How do I explain that sometimes at the end of the day,
The most exciting thing I did was put the laundry away.

And make a list for tomorrow;
-Make Room


r/poetry_critics 21h ago

Plip, Plop, Kerplunk

2 Upvotes

skim a stone down my back
and it will catch on the third kerplunk
where twisted roots
wormed their way across its surface
raising up off the skin
to block the sun warmed waves
of the first plip and second plop

there the rock will wait
as it slowly sinks bellow
to the sandy bank
that grits between my muscles
with nothing to keep it company
but the whip of reeds along the current
and the offbeat gurgle of my core

but if you so desire
don your rubber boots
and wade deep into my soul
if you can find it in the dark
and kick up past the thickened weeds
the stone will surely skip much further
from atop the raise of roots


r/poetry_critics 23h ago

Sensitive Content Eviscerate and own me

3 Upvotes

I would let you disassemble every part of me on your operating table.

Do with me what you please

Scramble up these useless brains

Kill the ambitions and foolish ideas I call my own dreams

Make me your love zombie or only follow your pre-programmed script and plan.

I'd let you rid all hopes of a life I'd want

To have you, make me stay here with you

You could throw me away in the trash, if you'd like.

Or reshape me into someone or something you truly like or want

The better dream man you'd truly like to have

Since I clearly am not it.


r/poetry_critics 1d ago

Morrow

5 Upvotes

Luckily it seems that this is only for me, 

A languid texture beguiling sorrow

She paints the canvas of the morrow

If a smile is what she needs

Then a smile let it be


r/poetry_critics 18h ago

"Starbirth"

1 Upvotes

Among origins of light, 

Frailty candy coated in dust, 

She knew naught of flight.

Born of pressure, 

unknown to the blind eyes that

Once closed now measure. 

Burst forth and blind without regret,

incur the halls of mirrored glass, 

to reach the echoes of the past.

Frigid connections haunt forevermore

a blunder made in material deep. 

Where she once lay, where i may reap. 

The birth of a star, 

Sudden as a switch

Trigger pull and body twitch.

Hammer fall, frozen time, 

I am worthy of my spine. 

One day stars shall rest my bones, 

the flesh i once loathed, 

whence gleaming light 

guide me home.

Id love to know what people think of this, especially what thoughts it brings to mind.

Im not a writer by any means, but i tend to write poetry about deep feelings or fleeting thoughts i have and i've never shared it before.

This poem in particular is about my journey with myself, the disconnect between my mind and body and coming to terms with my own life and death.


r/poetry_critics 1d ago

Two at a time

6 Upvotes

I take all my steps two at a time. It took me a while to learn how. Everyone always says they do when I ask but I don’t see anyone doing it. It’s difficult you need very good depth perception and you have to be okay with extreme momentum. I get to all my destinations twice as fast as anyone else. In fact they mostly never show up.


r/poetry_critics 19h ago

The first time my lung collapsed (looking for feedback)

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The first time my lung collapsed, my mom found a half carton of cigarettes in my apartment. 

It was the dead of winter. Midstate. January.
I wasn’t sure if I should go in. The pain was severe, yes, but it wasn’t uncommon to wake with some new sort of exquisite agony. 
Chest pain wasn’t out of the ordinary, either. I know they say you should always go in—but it was always nothing. 
Normally nothing. 

I waited half an hour before I sent the text—apologetically—to the only person I knew in town. A boy from work who I’d kissed a few times when we were both bored and numbed by the fluorescent churn of our lives at the publishing factory—sorry—company. 

Textbooks. None of the good stuff. 

He was hungover, but he came. A good friend, I thought. My heart twisted a little for him, white-knuckling the wheel, skittering over black ice, cursing under frosted breath. He asks again how I feel, how bad it hurts, if I could breathe. I was coughing now—dry, shallow croaks. I only mumble about how this will ruin my Sunday. I had laundry to do. My fridge was empty. 

The nurse greets us after two hearty slogs from a styrofoam cup. She retreats down the hall.
I smile a little when Nick shouts after her, can’t you get her a wheelchair or something?
She was too far though, and he didn’t shout that loud. But he wraps a long arm around me and we hobble to the examination room as one. 

It was maybe an hour of tests. Maybe more. Eventually, someone gives me a spot of morphine and I have the best five minutes of my life. I could do cartwheels, I say. 

Nick stays longer than he needs to. He fights me about leaving. Your family should be here! He barks, indignant. I nod. It’s okay. Go home. Sleep. 

He finally slinks out, drawing the curtain behind him. I promised to text him. 
A squirrelly nurse enters some time later and wordlessly releases the brakes of my gurney. 
Where are we going?
She deflects. 
Her eyes glued to the wheels. The monitor. She fixes a kink in my IV. 
I ask again. 
The saline sways, she steadies the bag. 

We parade past the nurse’s station, once unmoored with lively chatter, now stock-still with eight pairs of eyes tracking my descent. I start to cough again. 
No cartwheels. 

The doctor is plain. Efficient. Your entire left lung has collapsed. Your right one could go any minute. We need to operate now or you’re going to die. 

“Can I call my mom?”

He says sure with the cadence of a shrug. 
My phone rings four times while a flurry of strangers open my gown, insert a nasal cannula, drape me in polyethylene. I had texted her earlier: Going in. Nick’s driving me. 
Keep me updated, she replied. It was my father’s birthday. 

“‘Said my lung’s collapsed. ‘Think I’m gonna be a while.”
“Okay. I’ll drive up.” 
I tuck the phone under my thigh. 

Then there is a man sitting beside me. On my right. Not the surgeon at my left who rubs alcohol into my ribs. An older man, maybe in his seventies. White hair, thick mustache, pale blue eyes. Santa Claus, I think. 
He doesn’t introduce himself. He takes my hand, both of his over mine, and leans in like we’re old friends. 

Honey, he says, this is going to be very uncomfortable. 

There are two techs at the foot of my slab. Their hands nest gently around my ankles, bracing, unsure how much pressure to apply when the thrashing begins. I’ve been perfectly polite so far. 

I look back to the man on my right. Through his wire-rimmed bifocals, I think—I’m not certain—there are tears. He squeezes my hand tighter. 
The man on my left readies his tools. 

I’m not sure when my mom arrived. Time was real fuzzy after that. She looked straight past the tubes and suction and wires and complained about the weather. The long drive. The roads were very slick. 
Why did I call her?
I brush brown flakes of dried blood from my vinyl cot.
‘Cause that’s what you do. 

I asked every doctor. Every nurse. The assistant who loads me in and out of the elevator. I asked the radiologist. The students who linger in the corners and study their shoelaces and empty the commode. “Was it the cigarettes?”

Certainly doesn’t help, but no. 
No, this is completely different. 
We call that popcorn lung—nothing like this. 
No, this is undoubtedly a product of your genetic condition. You should quit smoking, though. 

Still, I need fresh clothes. My toothbrush. And the dog needs walking, so I surrender my keys. 

She turns the place over. Plunders the closets. Rifles every drawer. Takes careful inventory, until she finds it—her golden carton. She walks the dog. She feeds the dog. 
A girl my age helps me to the commode. 

I wished for years after that I’d tossed the pack. Or finished it. Or gave it to a friend. I didn’t smoke that often, it usually made me sick. But I liked the ritual of it, an excuse to stand out in the cold. 
Maybe it was the dryer sheets or the scented oils. The ceramic incense burner I left by the stove. I could use a new bra, the straps are too tight. The dog needs walking. 

One week later, a doctor rolls me on my side and rips the plastic tubing out like he’s starting a lawn mower. A week after that I take a half-day to get the staples removed. Unpaid. 
PTO burned out before Valentine’s Day. 

The second time my lung collapsed, I just called the ambulance. 

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r/poetry_critics 1d ago

Wait

2 Upvotes

Wait

You asked me to hate,
But I could only wait.

Time stands still,
When I’m waiting for you.


r/poetry_critics 21h ago

The Day The Air Said Nothing

1 Upvotes

When I open my eyes
the air which I breathe became thick
and I don't know
when the air became like that
maybe it was not the air
maybe it was all the things
which I never said.

I was breathing
but something inside me
was still waiting
for its first breath.

Then one day
the air which I breathe became thin
and at that time I started writing
because when the air leaves slowly
the silence enters
and when the silence enters
somewhere inside the silence
there was a voice
which was not asking me to live
and was not asking me to die
it only told me—
write.

So I started writing
not because I had something to say
but because the things which were
inside me
were becoming heavier than the air
and I thought
if I put them into words
maybe I could breathe again.

And everyday when I feel the air
it told me something.

Sometimes it told me
that there are people
who are alive
but never opened their eyes.

Sometimes it told me
that death is not the moment
when breathing stops
maybe it begins much earlier
when the things inside us
stop asking to be heard.

And sometimes
the air told me nothing
but even its nothing
was telling me something.

But today
when I feel the air
it didn't tell me anything.
Not one word.
Not one silence.

And I don't know why
but today the air feels different
like it is breathing without me
like it already went somewhere
and forgot to take me with it.

Maybe the air knows something
which I don't.

Maybe today
there is no more thing
left inside me
which wants to become a word.

Maybe today
my eyes are opening
for the last time.

And today the air didn't tell me anything
because today
is my death.

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