r/ReadMyScript • u/Complex_Occasion_964 • 17d ago

TV episode IT COULD BE WORSE: SITCOM PILOT

Hey I am a freshman in college. And my time really feels pointless here because my dream is to be a screenwriter/actor/voice actor. This is my very first script I have ever completed. I know it is probably not very good. But I would love some feedback. Thank you.

Recently divorced and desperate to win his ex-wife back, Shawn Holaday tries to balance fatherhood, a chaotic living situation, and co-parenting with his ex and her seemingly perfect fiancé.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1O8SxXQ1bf0nuRNaFrdgB8tQYGGo_ZyHj/view?usp=sharing

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u/Complex_Occasion_964 17d ago

You should be able to read it now.

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u/Complex_Occasion_964 16d ago

I really appreciate your feedback.

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u/Complex_Occasion_964 16d ago

Thank you for the feedback. Im going to have to focus on making it one cohesive story.